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Can a song have two bridges?

- OF COURSE -

But I had decided wrong making the bridges verses and making the verses part of the chorus. I may rewrite the middle verse-chorus thingy sometime to make the lyrics less samey... Anyway, here is "of course":

Rock Bernd: of course

The lyrics:

of course
I yearned
of course
I burned
of course
I learned
my lesson

she was all I had dreamed of
she was all I had longed for
my day-dream, my storm brewin'
pretty, sexy, flirty
ruthless, down-and dirty
a man's dream, a man's ruin

of course
I yearned
of course
I burned
of course
I learned

she knocked me out straight away
numbed I knew nothing to say
lovestruck head over heels
with everything feeling unreal

of course
I yearned
of course
I burned
of course
I learned
my lesson

[this is the part that I may rewrite to make the song's lyrics less boring:]
she was all I had dreamed of
she was all I had longed for
my day-dream, my storm brewin'
pretty, sexy, flirty
ruthless, down-and dirty
a man's dream, a man's ruin

of course
I yearned
of course
I burned
of course
I learned

I let her play me like a fool
she was hot, but could be so cruel
indulging her every whim
got me in the mess I'm now in

of course
I yearned
of course
I burned
of course
I learned
my lesson

[one repetition at the end may be okay to round off the song:]
she was all I had dreamed of
she was all I had longed for
my day-dream, my storm brewin'
pretty, sexy, flirty
ruthless, down-and dirty
a man's dream, a man's ruin

of course
I yearned
of course
I burned
of course
I learned

don't wanna be your second best

... is the (provisional or final - I don't know) title that Yerzhan gave his new song. Together with a draft recording Yerzhan provided dummy lyrics that I could use as template* (now, that is what I call a great service!). But actually, at this time I would like to point the rhyming structure that I use in the verses out to you:


VERSE
you came last night
and said you could stay over
I lost my mind
I felt cajoled and flattered
oh yes, you knocked me out

I said "all right"
felt like a pig in clover
and drew the blinds
I lay awake thereafter
'cause I was getting doubts

CHORUS
I only was your second choice
while your man's away from home
I could hear my inner voice
would it do and would I want to spend my life as your toy boy
...


The rhyme pattern of the verses is:
ABCXD
ABCXD

Cool, ey? Somebody picked at my rhyming the other day, alleging that I would always use the same pattern: ABAB. It IS true that I am a 'rhyming addict' (like Steven Tyler, one of my heroes) and often go to lenghts for a good rhyme, but I do vary my rhyme patterns (normally to mark different song parts). IMO rhymes enhance the flow of songs.

*if you haven't heard/read about my 'template method' scroll back to the early entries in this blog or just start from here:
my template method



fool for two

I've posted the text on several 'native' boards to check out if it will work as I see it. Of course, I know that the lines "fool for one, fool for two" don't make much sense per se, but I'm curious how they will be conceived.

fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
why are you doing what you do

you've laid all our secrets bare
we're the topic of the day
just go to the market square
to listen what the people say

our weaknesses, our private life,
all our foibles, all our faults
public where the gossip's rife
not a chance to call a halt

fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
why are you doing what you do

our kids scorn of the class
while we're the scorn of our town
hear them snicker where we pass
did you intend to play their clown?

fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
make fools of our children, too

when I fell in love with you
I found you open-hearted and outspoken
I'd no idea there'd be a risk
of a family life out in the open

fool for one
fool for two
fool enough for me and you
fool for one
fool for two
make fools of our children, too

burning in the cold

A text I wrote in between. Standard pop structure (note the headings) which indicates that I don't have music for it and neither intend to do anything about it soon. My own songs are usually 'music first' and hardly ever adhere to a given structure, they simply follow my gut feeling - and the lyrics have to fall into line ;-)

Here is burning in the cold (lyrics only). Let's see if someone will pick it:

VERSES
with cold, piercing eyes
you're looking right through me
making out my weak spots
my insecurities

you give me no warmth
I shiver when you're close
no hope for some patience
you keep me exposed

LIFT
I still don't understand
how I could fall in love with you

CHORUS
so I'm burning in the cold
I'm burning in the cold
this pain I'm going through
I'm burning in the cold

VERSE
you give me no hope
you've made your point quite clear
when I lay bare my feelings
all I get is your sneer

LIFT
I still don't understand
how I could fall in love with you

CHORUS
so I'm burning in the cold
I'm burning in the cold
this pain I'm going through
I'm burning in the cold

BRIDGE
the night we spent together
will remain to me
a special memory
the night I fell in love with you

CHORUS
now I'm burning in the cold
I'm burning in the cold
this pain I'm going through
I'm burning in the cold

Toplining without singing

... normally does not work out because the singer cannot know the tune that I had in mind when I was writing the words. I did it anyway - that is I invented lyrics to 'fill the gaps' in the music - for an Jamaican musician because I like his music.

The track has two 'sections'. It seems to require six similar stanzas in the first section and four in the second. This is why I wrote two quite different lyrical parts. I'll call the song "floating" (my partner's working title is "only you"):


let's go for a swim
in the sparkling blue sea
let's be like children
today we are free

when we look back
we cannot see the beach
we feel quite happy
to stay out of reach

let our minds sail
while we head for the sun
till we reach spaces
where time has begun

gently we drift
where the sky meets the sea
float in the presence
and float endlessly

there is just us
and the endless blue sea
here we are timeless
here we are free

gently we drift
where the sky meets the sea
float in the presence
and float endlessly

- - - -

they party
oh yeah, they party
people are dancing
they dance on the beach

cool drinks
oh yeah they've cool drinks
they have a great time
great time on the beach

kissing
oh yeah, they're kissing
lovers are snogging
snogging on the beach

living
life can be a party
buoyant and joyful
like fun on the beach