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blow away ;-)

No, that's not the latest title.
I am applying my 'template approach' to a pop 'project' I'm working on. This is my my dummy text for the verses:

you - you make my day
I cannot see you
I'm on my way
but now
that I am near you
I want to hear you
and blow away

These lyrics make no sense? Excactly! They're not supposed to. But they match the tune perfectly - that's their function. Now I 'only' need to find some words that actually do make sense.

The song already has a chorus, by the way. And a title as well. Marcell and I have been working on this project on and off since quite some time. Here is the chorus to "under your charm":

you light my nights
as you light my days
to see you smile
blows me away
I hold my breath
when you're in my arms
I melt away
under your charm


But back to writing some verses, only two, actually...

rock the boat - completed

I only added a bridge, that must suffice. Since the verses are rather generic there is actually nothing more to say so it is better to just 'shut up', I guess.

This is the bridge:

no use asking how we got into the heavy seas
no use praying for salvation
with open eyes we've run into our miseries
heading for our own damnation


The structure that I have in mind would be: verse - chorus - verse - chorus - bridge - chorus.

rock the boat

Song titles that contain the word "rock" seem to 'sell' better. From my last short vacation I brought back the idea to "rock the boat". Other than "rock the place" or "die hard rockers" it has a 'message' that goes beyond "let's have a good time":

CH
we rock the boat
while the world is sinking
rock the boat
and remain unthinking
we rock the boat

V
we throw our future in the bin
ignore the mess that we got in
we fell the last mahogany
for guitar necks for you and me

V
what we create gets out of hand
wreaking havoc on our land
we prefer to look away
don't raise your voice - don't spoil our day

That's all I have at the moment. I decided to leave the eco-subject vage this time except for the lines "we fell the last mahogany -
for guitar necks for you and me" that I find funny. I'm not happy with the 'for ... for', though - got to think about it some more). The text could do with another verse and a bridge.

"Valentine" completed

I added a second chorus section that is not in the music Medel sent. Apart from that it's a perfect fit. Maybe except the little word "while" in the third verse which would require an added pickup note. I prefer "while you would have your freedom" to "while you'd have your freedom" which would match perfectly but to me sound somewhat clumsy. If need be the first word might simply be omitted.


you never send me flowers
and you never give me sweets
when you're on a business trip
you never think of me

not even on the 14th
will there be a greeting card
don't you ever fear you'd lost
the key to my poor heart

Valentine, my lover
each time that you're here
your mind
seems to roam in other spheres

Valentine, my lover
it's your special day
your chance
to live up to your name

you're taking me for granted
and that I would wait for you
(while) you would have your freedom
doing what you love to do

not even on the 14th
do you spare a second thought
for what I am feeling
or what my last days have brought

Valentine, my lover
each time that you're here
your mind
seems to roam in other spheres

Valentine, my lover
it's your special day
your chance
to live up to your name

dear Valentine
can't you see
if you don't change
you'll lose me
for good

dear Valentine
can't you see
if you don't change
you'll lose me
for good

Valentine

I was sent a tune that I will try to find matching words for. The composer gave it the title "Valentine". That's a male name, and quite obviously "Valentine's Day" come to mind. First I checked Wikipedia what is know about "Valentine's Day". This is what I found:

Valentine's day evolved into an occasion in which lovers expressed their love for each other by presenting flowers, offering confectionery, and sending greeting cards (known as "valentines").

In Europe, Saint Valentine's Keys are given to lovers "as a romantic symbol and an invitation to unlock the giver’s heart"

Valentine's Day symbols that are used today include the heart-shaped outline, doves, and the figure of the winged Cupid. Since the 19th century, handwritten valentines have given way to mass-produced greeting cards

Numerous early Christian martyrs were named Valentine.[11] The Valentines honored on February 14 are Valentine of Rome (Valentinus presb. m. Romae) and Valentine of Terni (Valentinus ep. Interamnensis m. Romae).[12] Valentine of Rome was a priest in Rome who was martyred in 269 and was added to the calendar of saints by Pope Galesius in 496 and was buried on the Via Flaminia.

The earliest description of February 14 as an annual celebration of love appears in the Charter of the Court of Love. The charter, allegedly issued by Charles VI of France at Mantes-la-Jolie in 1400, describes lavish festivities to be attended by several members of the royal court, including a feast, amorous song and poetry competitions, jousting and dancing.[52] Amid these festivities, the attending ladies would hear and rule on disputes from lovers.

And this is what I have made of it so far:

VERSE
you never send me flowers
and you never give me sweets
when you're on a business trip
you never think of me

not even on the 14th
will there be a greeting card
sometimes I think that you lost
the key to my poor heart

CHORUS
Valentine, my lover
it's your special day
your chance
to live up to your name


I actually wrote the chorus first as I normally do. Also, I think that the chorus should have two parts as it is repeated immediately. The composer did not say if the song is meant for female or male vocals. I assume a female voice. I guess that will be fine because the second song he sent is a duet.