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tomcat

I have been raiding my 'scrap book'. There I discovered the scetch of a chorus. This is what has become of it:

I can smell your hunger and arousal
I know where your hand slides in the night
never mind, I won't reveal your secret
be assured I won't switch on the light

no use to hide, I see you in the dark
I have come so I can leave my mark
spare your tears, and spare your fear
I'm the tomcat - I'll take you while we're here

you don't have to fight off your desire
I don't see why you should feel ashamed
I could be the answer to your wishes
you know, nothing ventured, nothing gained

no use to hide, I see you in the dark
I have come so I can leave my mark
spare your tears, and spare your fear
I'm the tomcat - I'll take you while we're here


The lyrics look like rock to me. There is no bridge this time - that leaves room for a guitar solo ;-) The chorus should be repeated once more at the end, I guess.

the world's song

... came into existence because I needed lyrics for my backing track 2017-D.


got up this morning
found the world had changed
for the better
the sun shone
the birds sang
happy bird songs

the sky was all blue
and the trees bloomed
in many colours
the kids played
in the garden
singing kids' songs

kids' songs
bird songs

[solo]

I had my breakfast
on the terrace
rolls and coffee
also fruitcake
from the bakery
whistling cake songs

I looked around
where my wife was
then I saw her
ride a white cloud
across the bright sky
singing sky songs

sky songs
cake songs

come along
sing along
sing your song
come along
sing along
sing your song

we dance through life
with our bare feet
touching moist grass
while our mind tries
to take in
the world's song

we close our eyes
as the night falls
and we dream of
the secrets
and mysteries
of the world's song

world's song
world's song

rhythm - rhyme - REPETITION

... are the most important ingredients of a modern pop song (remember my post on "lousy lyrics"?). It does no harm if the verses use good imagery or tell cool stories, too, but that comes second. We're talking pop here, not country.

In Germany the radio stations up and down the country currently play "no roots" (Alice Merton) all the time. How often is the line "I've got no roots, but my home was never on the ground" repeated? It feels like a hundred times! That's modern pop for you! With the advent of smartphones the attention span of young people has deteriorated and you have to repeat the hook every two seconds so they will get it. Just kidding. It's not just young people anyway, an elderly president of a huge nation governs his country be means of twitter feeds. That's a maximum of 280 characters!

Whatever... In a modern pop song you need a good hook and many repetitions, and, of course, a good, consistent rhythm. Rhymes help, but actually are not THAT important.

In Alice Merton's song it is not only the hook that is repeated. As she uses the 'standard' structure of a modern pop song that goes: verse - lift - chorus - verse - lift - chorus - bridge - chorus* there are also the lifts that are repeated. And she goes beyond this common 'pop recipe' by repeating the last line in each verse like a refrain, too: "'Cause I've got memories and travel like gypsies in the night". To top it all off she re-uses the image** and the lines of the first verse in the bridge! As simple as her lyrics look at first sight as much can you learn from them.

* Actually it is verse - verse - lift - chorus - chorus..., but basically it's THE pop structure

** Yep, there is a cool image right at the beginning of the song to 'set the stage': "I like digging holes and hiding things inside them".

doin' my own thing

you keep giving advice
that I despise
you know all recipes
that no one needs
you say you're the man
I don't give a damn

I ain't singing your song
ain't even singing along

'cos I'm doin' my own thing
don't need your approval or cheer
'cos I am my own king
I decide which direction to steer
doin' my own thing

you've got knowledge to share
tell me who cares
you know lessons to learn
lessons I spurn
you could show me the way
don't spoil my day

I ain't singing your song
ain't even singing along

'cos I'm doin' my own thing
don't need your approval or cheer
'cos I am my own king
I decide which direction to steer
doin' my own thing

why don't you leave me alone
and have a life of your own

'cos I'm doin' my own thing
don't need your approval or cheer
'cos I am my own king
I decide which direction to steer
doin' my own thing

****

No bridge this time. The part that begins "why don't you leave me alone..." is meant as a lift just like "I ain't singing your song...".

yet another edit: dead easy

Somehow I couldn't get accustomed to the last two lines of the bridge so I rewrote them yet again:

I admit I have a loose tongue
it is true, I cannot keep mum
no one who shows some sympathy
instead they all just turn against me


Two people argued that the line "if you don't give it a rest" in the chorus doesn't quite match with the rest of the lyrics: "... And now he's saying Give it a rest?". As the word "you" in the chorus is used in its generic sense ("one") all through and I eliminated an ambiguity in the rest of the text ("your camel's back") I think it should be clear that 'I' am actually referring to 'myself': you (one) can get into a mess if you (one) don't give it (the joking, pranking, or using provocative language) a rest. The 'you' would be 'me' ;-)


dead easy
to make a fool of yourself
dead easy
to get into a mess
dead easy
if you don't give it some thought
dead easy
if you don't give it a rest