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Two new MotorPlanet songs in the making

Writing for MotorPlanet, my long lasting partners, means replacing 'Gibberish' (any nonsense text that Holger sings to mark the vocal line) with proper words, or, as I call it, applying my template method.

In song #1 Holger uses fragments of an older song that we wrote together as a substitute for the chorus:

I'm gonna
I'm gonna
get my share


... sung twice, then repated. That's easy. I made it:

don't tell me
don't tell me
what I know

I can see
I can see
'cause it shows


My idea behind it: 'she' commences to tell me that there is another - but 'I' already thought as much. My proposed title will be "don't tell me what I know".

To write the verses I first have to learn how many verses there will be at the end. Holger only sent one sound file each for the verses and the chorus, so that I cannot tell the structure of the song. It's no use telling a story, only to discover later that you have to squeeze in another part or cut one out. Yet I've begun writing fragments, nontheless.

Nonsense-version/template (as far as I could make out):

Hey girl, what you're talking about
it's just my bad that I'm a sinner
but I found out that I love you


my words - at this moment:

what's all that beatin' 'bout the bush - the middle stress does not 'sit', I have to re-check against the tune
bite back what you are tryin' to say-ay - "tryin'" sung like one syllable
maybe use it with another man - crap? Maybe too cryptic

Hey girl, just get off your tush - needs a pause to fit: Hey girl _ just get off your tush
I'm sick of all your lame excuses - perfect match
just make your exit while you can - got to check the stress at the end, might not work

I actually like the second part. But it's still early days.

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