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upside down

This is the result after checking the words I'd written for the verses against the music. I had to shorten a few lines, and replace a word here and there that were too long or where a stress did not fit. That's the normal procudure of fine tuning the words once the basics are done. You might note that I made the chorus present tense - as the tense suggests, this makes the chorus more present:

VERSE
we had seemed perfect once
the envy of all our friends
till one day I found you out
you'd been two-timing me
and not just one one-night stand
you (just) hurt me once to much
I broke it off there and then
and moved so we would lose touch

CHORUS
now you stand in my door
tearing all barriers down
I can hold my grudge no more
you turn my world around
I'm falling for you anew
you turn me upside down

VERSE
I harboured my grudge 'gainst you
it made me feel better first
you sinner - I the saint
thus I've deceived myself
you sure were a slut and liar
but there had been love as well
affection, fun, and desire
mem'ries I could not quell

Chorus

Chorus

the angels' choir

Inspired by the sentiments of the season...

while the bathtub slowly is filling up
she downs her pills with a glass of red wine
she tests the waterto make sure it's fine
somewhere she'd read it must not be too hot

resting her head on a bath pillow she'd brought
she's all set for her bath - peaceful and quiet
she reaches out for the razor blade knife
as soon as she feels the numbness set in

she's overcoming
all pretence and disguise
she's overcoming
his deceptions and lies

and she's hearing music
wonderful, beautiful music
now, that she's joining the angels' choir

she is fascinated by billowing clouds
that soon begin col'ring the water bright red
while contemplating what might lie ahead
she's getting tired and dizzy at last

she's overcoming
all pretence and disguise
she's overcoming
his deceptions and lies

and she's hearing music
wonderful, beautiful music
now, that she's joining the angels' choir

she's hearing music
wonderful, beautiful music
now, that she's joining the angels' choir



MERRY CHRISTMAS & A HAPPY NEW YEAR!

beginning with the chorus

If you have got a song with a chorus (the vast majority of songs) or are writing with such in mind then it is a good idea to begin with writing the words for the chorus and go from there because the chorus is the outstanding part of the song and holds its central message. It's easier to add a story for the verses afterwards, once you know what you are writing about, than the other way around, i.e. trying to come up with a hook or a statement later that would somehow glue your verses together.

At the moment I am working on my unfinished backing tracks that still lack words and - obviously - vocals. Track 2016-05, an AAA song, will become "money, always money". AAA means it has only got verses, no chorus, no bridge. Therefore I could write it simply beginning with the first line of the first verse and just let it sort of develop itself. I will actually repeat the first verse at the end - after a guitar solo - to provide some kind of 'bracket' and also put more weight on the main idea. The first verse goes:

money, always money
can't you think of some other topic
I cannot find it too funny
that we always talk 'bout money
won't you shut up for a moment
before all this talk gets chronic


But I'm digressing, let me get back to my subject.

With track 2016-09 I need a different approach. This is a ABAB song that alternates verses and choruses. Choruses (the B parts) are repeated, hence they carry much more weight than the verses. Actually the song goes ABAB[solo]BB. The four choruses practically define the song. This is what I have:

then you stood in my door
and tore all barriers down
(I) could hold my grudge no more
you turned my world around [might read 'life' instead of 'world']
I fell for you anew
you turned me upside down


"upside down" will be its title. Maybe I should shine a little more light on the title:

then you stood in my door
and turned me upside down
(I) could hold my grudge no more
once you'd torn all barriers down
I fell for you anew
you turned me upside down


This text implies a story that we have known each other before, she may have cheated on me, I would hold a grudge against her because of that... If the story continues after the first chorus in a manner that we have got together again, then I will have to vary the chorus a bit so it will make sense later in the song:


when you stood in my door
you'd turned me upside down
(I) could hold my grudge no more
once you'd torn all barriers down
I've fallen for you anew
you've turned me upside down


Alternatively, I could go back in time and add other aspects in the second verse: me living with my grudge, for example.

Here's to the English language - Rows in a row

My title "rows in a row" is a little pun, actually. The first "row" should rhyme with "cow", the second with "low". Isn't the English language too cute? I never knew the pronunciation of "recipe" until I had a discussion with another hobby cook and we both seemd to be using some funny word that the other could not understand (in my mind "recipe" rhymed with "kite"). We had a good laugh when we found out that we meant the very same.

Whatever. KOMIR set "rows in a row" to music - but didn't get the joke. It's a nice song anyway:

KOMIR: rows in a row

These are my lyrics:


to start a row
you need neither cause nor reason
act like I'd committed treason
you heed neither time nor season
but I don't wanna leave
ain't gonna leave
I don't wanna leave you at all

rows in a row
can't we agree at all
will there always be
rows in a row

when we make up
you can be a real dish
you'd do anything I wish
no you ain't a cold fish
and I don't wanna leave
ain't gonna leave
I don't wanna leave at all

rows in a row
can't we agree at all
will there always be
rows in a row

rows in a row
can't we agree at all
will there always be
rows in a row

Huggy Tuggy

While creating the music for "flotsam" - a rather serious and tough subject - I found I should also add more fun stuff to my Rock Bernd III album that I'm preparing at the moment. Therefore, I wrote "HuggyTuggy". I came up with it during my vacation - always frees the mind. The wrong English is intended, by the way (as was the slightly cryptic "who is I"), and I might replace one or another of the two-syllable lines should I feel like it.


think me
hear me
dig me
my Huggy Tuggy

touch me
claw me
hurt me
my Huggy Tuggy

no way
no way
no, no way
I say where we been

sense me
feel me
love me
my Huggy Tuggy

smell me
bite me
eat me
my Huggy Tuggy

no way
no way
no, no way
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no way
no way
no, no way
I say where we been