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two more parts (or another two part verse) for "making money"

... using the same odd meter, I'm afraid. The meters of the two parts differ slightly (as in the first verse), and the meter of the very last line is 'off' in comparison with the corresponding line of the first part as well as the corresponding second part of the first verse. That is because the line only has three stresses instead of four and also ends on an unstressed syllable. I may have to find a different rhyme or rewrite both corresponding lines. But then, I may have to rewrite the lot ;-)


a man seemed to take cover in a back lane
and preferring to stay out of sight
hooded jacket, dark colors, and sneakers
he looked a rather dubious shade in the dark

I approached him trying to show no disdain
and also overcoming my fright
he seemed to be waiting for me to speak up
while in his hand he kept dangling a crowbar


Did I mention that I always have a tune in my mind when I write? That doesn't mean that I remember the melody when I get back to adding to a text. It means that the rather weird meter DID work at least once (actually I could make it work with a different tune when I edited the first verse). But the lines don't 'flow' particularly well. What to do about it I will decide when I try to sing them for real - or someone else does.

Currently the meter (number of stresse per line) goes:
3 - 3 - 4 - 4 in the first parts
4 - 3 - 4 - 4 in the second (in the second verse - the one above - it is: 4 - 3 - 4 - 3; if you put a stress on "while" it also would be 4 - 3 - 4 - 4, but the last syllable would still be unstressed).

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